I am continually being surprised by the development not only of the characters, but also of the action itself, as I write this script.
This morning, two additional considerations came into view--one of which hit me like a gut punch; the other a revelation.
The first was in the letters page of the New York Times--readers commenting on a recent article on the decline of sexuality in middle class American society. One letter noted that in our anything goes culture...
We really are drenched in prurience, not sex. The difference is vital. The mass media have trivialized eroticism, and replaced it with titillation, and a kind of coarse, juvenile sensitivity, as the mass media do with everything.SEE: http://www.nytimes.com/2010/07/06/opinion/l06sex.html?_r=1&ref=opinion
San Francisco, June 27, 2010
this is a fascinating discussion, as interesting as--if not more than--the original article.
So far, my script totters at the edge of pure titillation; it is indeed somewhat coarse, and arguably juvenile.
Thus indicted, can I find a way to redeem the narrative, to explore the nature of eroticism, and create something that is not mere prurience?
The second consideration was Janet's observation, which blew the top of my head off. Janet--who has provided many invaluable suggestions to help breath life into my characters--noted that the sequence in the park recapitulates Eve's tempting of Adam, and their casting out of the Garden of Eden. Policewoman Anne, of course, plays a very god-like role, ultimately banishing Terry and Cindy from the park.
Does this revelation help to resolve the first question? The challenge is before me.